Monday, February 28, 2005

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I breathed my first –
Eyes closed,
In a wild storm
Shouting a million whispers;
Your name.

I breathed my last –
On an empty park bench
Under a twilight sky
Staring at your back;
As you walked away.

8 Comments:

Blogger Vitalstatistix said...

Who is the person being referred to when you say 'your name' in the first stanza and who is the 'you' of the second ? Do they refer to the same person/object ?

5:52 AM  
Blogger Kumari said...

Your Name ==> His Name
Stretching that , it would be His back as He walked away :p
Yes they are the same person :)

But seriously don't tell me dat was tough :(

6:00 AM  
Blogger Primalsoup said...

Shouting a million whispers?! Very nice :)

So, did you go for Barefoot in the Park on 14th Feb?

7:48 AM  
Blogger Vignesh said...

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8:34 AM  
Blogger Vignesh said...

Once again, neato, Lady K !

For some reason, this reminds me of a Clint Eastwood movie, he is sitting on the stair case of the Washington monument in DC (I think) and watching the woman he was talking to walk away. He thinks to himself, if she looks back and waves, then shes interested. He waits, waits and waits and in true filmy style, she finally turns around and seeing him look at her, waves. It was a pretty bad movie, and for some reason I remember that scene pretty vividly...

I miss The Park in Chennai. The Park in Blore isn't as good. I love Aqua ! Should put my pics from that place up soon... time to Flickr !!!

8:36 AM  
Blogger Vitalstatistix said...

No, that wasn't tough. Just missed a point. After the first read I was under the impression that in the first stanza it is you who whispers his name. In which case I wondered why ever you mentioned the storm and hence I wondered if there was a deeper meaning to the whole thing that I had missed. Now on second read, I presume that it is the storm that whispers his name.
if(myInitialPresumptionIstrue)
you have a question to answer;
else
issue closed;

8:38 AM  
Blogger Kumari said...

@Soups: Thanks :)I was cooling my heels at home ...no Theatre company :(

@Vignesh: Thankooo ;)
hey do u know that movie's name? i have seen it but can't recollect the name. Yup, i do like The Park here tho

@Vital: true to your name, you do ask for vital stats don't ya? ;)
hmm...Little Princess' Little Prince :p

9:13 AM  
Blogger Vignesh said...

It was Clint Eastwood and Rene Russo, 'In the Line of Fire'. A pretty decent movie.

Really want to see Million Dollar Baby though. I love Eastwood and I absolutely loved Unforgiven.

11:42 AM  

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